Finch’s Thoughts

Finch’s Thoughts

My favorite book to write so far has been A Curious Mask, the one I am currently editing in hopes of getting it published soon. Whilst reading through it, I noticed something that I did that in hindsight, I’m very proud of. Throughout the book, we see into the main character’s thoughts. His name is Finch, and he’s a wister, which means he only feels one emotion and has more energy and more detailed senses than your average human. Because his one emotion is curiosity, most of his thoughts tend to be questions.

In the very first chapter, before Finch creates his mask, there is a questioning thought of his between almost every paragraph, including dialogue. I was dissatisfied with this, since to the new reader is might seem like the entire book is going to be scatterbrained. It lacked coherency and might cause the reader more confusion than the hook chapter should. The repeated breaks in the story caused an incoherence that would cause a new reader more confusion than the hook chapter should.

I seriously considered changing it but postponed the decision until I had read a little further in. Looking at it again, I’m really glad I didn’t change it. Finch’s point of view is extremely difficult to write. He’s constantly thinking, assessing, questioning, and observing every little detail around him. If I were to write his points of view in first person, I believe it would end up a jumbled mess of sensations, questions, and answers. It would be extremely difficult to follow any sort of plot. Looking back on the first chapter, it’s actually the best way to describe his mind while at the same time introducing the story, which is in a big way about his mind.

The very title of the book A Curious Mask is about Finch’s mind and how he controls himself. After he has his mask built and in place when we see his questioning thoughts, they are crammed together into a single paragraph. He’s learned to control them so they don’t interrupt the plot. In fact, his thoughts sometimes push the plot along. Without realizing exactly what I was doing, I made it so that the more frequent Finch’s thoughts break in, the less in control of himself he is. When he’s in complete control, we see little to nothing of what he’s thinking. When he’s losing it, as he does in the second book, they spill out of him and all over the place.

His emotion may not change throughout the book, but the more influence the other main character has on him, the more his mask, his control, changes. I’m happy with how I wrote him, even if it’s a little confusing at first. Now, if someone were to say “this is too confusing a first chapter, yada yada,” and provide evidence of why that’s worse than accurately portraying him, then I’ll listen. Until then, it stays.


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